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Friday, 8 March 2019

My describe writing

Hey It  Freya today i'm going to show you my  describe writing  I did  two but I'm going to show you my Favorited one what it about the gorilla.



The light orange and yellow sky rises up like the tide came rushing in It was magnificent .

Out of nowhere a humongous gorilla that was dark grey and had soft eyes but it looked like it had been in a fight with a big tiger. I thought it was  herry beast. It came charging at a rusty old black nosy car with a big crash.

The rusty old black car Crumble to  Pieces like a rocky mountain brock.

I felt Frightened. soft wind  was swishing in my face I Froze in fer. The Nature was a very large Sound.

 I think it look cool do you think it is cool let me no if you like it down below bye.😁

3 comments:

  1. I really like the words you use for the describing words. How much describing words did you use?.

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  2. Thank you and I used ..... I don't no how much I used maybe 17 or something have a magnificent day bye.

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  3. Kia ora Freya it is Michaela here I like the way that you describe about the sky. When I was reading it your story had good interesting words. Maybe next you can proofread your top sentence but it is a good blog post.

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